How Do I Avoid Wordiness?

Wordy: Due to the fact that you did not finish writing the instruction manual in time for the computer program to be shipped by April 21, you are fired.

Not Wordy: Because you did not finish writing the instruction manual in time for the computer program to be shipped by April 21, you are fired.

Wordy: In spite of the fact that she did not graduate from college, she is a multi-millionaire.

Not Wordy: Although she did not graduate from college, she is a multi-millionaire.

Wordy: Despite the fact that she did not graduate from college, she is a multi-millionaire.

Not Wordy: Although she did not graduate from college, she is a multi-millionaire.

Wordy: For the reason that you did not finish writing the instruction manual in time for the computer program to be shipped by April 21, you are fired.

Not Wordy: Because you did not finish writing the instruction manual in time for the computer program to be shipped by April 21, you are fired.

Wordy: The reason that the problem exists is because ….

Not Wordy: The problem exists because ….

Wordy: At this point in time, I want to get married.

Not Wordy: At this time, I want to get married.

Also Not Wordy: Right now, I want to get married.

Wordy: For a long period of time, I have wanted to get married.

Not Wordy: For a long time, I have wanted to get married.

Wordy: You should go get the pitcher of water.

Not Wordy: You should get the pitcher of water.

Wordy: Because of the fact that I went to college, I am deep in debt.

Not Wordy: Because I went to college, I am deep in debt.

Wordy: It has come to my attention that ….

Not Wordy: I have learned ….

Wordy: In the lease, it states ….

Not Wordy: The lease states ….

Wordy: In spite of the fact that he is rich, he is cheap.

Not Wordy: Although he is rich, he is cheap.

You should be aware that the phrases there are and there is and it is are often wordy and can be deleted.

Wordy: There are three reasons why you should accept my recommendations.

Not Wordy: You should accept my recommendations for three reasons.

Wordy: There are three recommendations that I wish to make.

Not Wordy: I wish to make three recommendations.

Wordy: When I started working in the chemistry lab, there were several techniques that I did not know.

Not Wordy: When I started working in the chemistry lab, I did not know several techniques.

Wordy: My guidebook will be especially helpful when new employees have questions and there is no one around to answer them.

Not Wordy: My guidebook will be especially helpful when new employees have questions and no one is around to answer them.

Are You Wordy?

If you are using a computer, be aware that most or all word progressing programs have a FIND command that is often located in the EDIT menu.

If you often write “due to the fact that,” search for that phrase, then replace it with “because.”

If you often write “in spite of the fact that,” search for that phrase, then replace it with “although.”

If you often write “despite the fact that,” search for that phrase, then replace it with “although.”

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